Well guys, I've written a sneak peak for Season 2: Episode 1. Tell me what you think.
Location: The Flying L
Gloria Oldenpinner walked up to the checkpoint that led from the Isle into the Flying L. She flashed her identity card at a few Automations who were patrolling the entryway. The Pacifier in charge looked at the card, and with a creak of its arm he waved the girl through.
The Flying L looked just the way Gloria's friends told her about. Also known as the Flying Inn, the L was open for all of Lucky's faithful mercenaries and bounty hunters. Gloria knew that the man who had previously owned it had died. He had supposedly died in a mining accident while trying to recover his fortune. Now a distant cousin of his owned it.
Gloria climbed a few staircases and entered the receptionist's office. She would be around the area for the next few weeks and thought she'd rent out a room. She quickly checked in and decided to look around the place before heading to her bunk for some sleep. She climbed another staircase and read the sign, Larry's Crows Nest. It looked to be some sort of restaurant. People sat around tables and Glow saw some people eating and laughing and a few fighting.
She noticed a man sitting alone at a small table in the corner. "Mind if I sit here?" Gloria asked, pointing to a seat across from him. He just stared at her, not once moving. He wore dark goggles attached to a black and white checkered mask that covered the rest of his face. On his head was a tall, black hat with a single white feather sticking out of the side. He seemed quite dignified, but sort of in a humble way. Gloria pulled out a chair and sat down. The man suddenly spoke, "Do you know who I am?" Gloria shook her head. "The name's Darkgrate, Xonos Darkgrate. You've got a nerve sitting right down at my table." "I can move if you like," she said, standing up to go.
"Hold it!" Darkgrate whispered fiercely, staring toward the entrance of the place. Gloria watched as a man with uncombed hair, buck teeth, and ratty clothes walked out of the restaurant. "Who is that?" she asked. "The owner," Darkgrate told her. "His name is Benjamin Larkcape. He's, um, my cousin." "What's the big deal of watching him then?" asked Gloria. "I'm, urh, on a m-mission," he stammered. "See you around." And with that, Xonos tipped his hat and quickly ran out the door.
Gloria shook her head and decided to leave too.
Do you have any specific changes that would like me to change here?