The Elderfun Chronicles Discussion

[Shadowfire_Fanglecraft]

Great job @Jacoby_Elderfun1 You keep leaving me in suspense AGGGGH!

[Scarlett_Darkhall]

@Jacoby_Elderfun1 Ahhh!! There's so much going on, its so awesome!!

You keep leaving me in suspense AGGGGH!

Ik!!

Btw, I see you used the Fog chamber..

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

@Shadowfire_Fanglecraft
Thank you very much. Only two more episodes though and the suspense will be over. (Or will it, )

@Scarlett_Darkhall
Haha! Thank you.

Btw, I see you used the Fog chamber..

I'm a bit confused. Do you have it in your role-play? I didn't know anyone else thought of it.

[Ilayne_Merespark]

I'm a bit confused. Do you have it in your role-play?

She's the one who mentioned it first

Btw, great job, can't wait for more!!!

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

@Ilayne_Merespark
Oh! In here role-play? Can I see it please?

Thanks!

[Scarlett_Darkhall]

When you realize you just accidentally deleted your post.

Scarlett Darkhall: My Story

My eyes opened. I blinked furiously, trying to make out something in the pitch black darkness. Where am I? Then slowly, the memories flooded back. I tried to make sense of them, but before I could, a sudden burst of green light shone above me. Someone had turned on the lantern by using a switch, revealing the tiny room which I was being kept in. But I soon realized that this was no ordinary cell. I noticed dozens of pipes everywhere, and there was no door…

Although I never mentioned the name "Fog Chamber" anywhere, I described it as one. But it's totally cool, I didn't put a copyright on it or anything! You're good! I was just pointing out the coincidence.

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

Although I never mentioned the name "Fog Chamber" anywhere, I described it as one. But it's totally cool, I didn't put a copyright on it or anything! You're good! I was just pointing out the coincidence.

Ok. Cool. I really need to catch up on your role-play!

I think the ideas are going to be different. I'm planning on making mine like an arena. Thanks for being ok with it!

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

SEASON 1: EPISODE 17 IS OUT!

Read it here:

The Elderfun Chronicles

Tell me what you thought of it! The next episode is the season finale!

• It was great!
• It was ok.
• I haven't read it.
• It wasn't that good.

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[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

Here is a sneak peak into the season finale!

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They ran down the seats of the bleachers, passing an astonished Lucky. They jumped over the low railing, trying to save Charles. "Fire!" commanded Smith to the Automations. Shots rang. Alarms went off everywhere. Automations came pouring into the arena from the double doors. Jacoby, who had been pulling against his ropes, finally broke free. He ran blindly into the misty Fog which had made everything hard to see. "Oomph!" He had banged into someone leaning against the rail. It was Lucky. "You're finally going to get what's coming to you!" Jacoby yelled. He beat his fists into the Emperor's skull, which banged against the rail with each blow. Lucky called out for help, his arms flailing around. With all the weight on the rail, it suddenly gave way. The both fell into the pit with Jacoby still pounding into the evil man.

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@Hanna_Brassheart
Is that too harsh? It's not as bad as it seems. That's just the most intense part.

[Hanna_Brassheart]

He beat his fists into the Emperor's skull, which banged against the rail with each blow.

Maybe you could make this part a little less intense. Then I give it the green light! Looking good!

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

@Hanna_Brassheart
Ok! I figured skull wouldn't be the right page so I switched it out for head. It must have not saved. I'll switch some words around! Thanks!

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

I'm almost done with Episode 18! The only problem is I have way to much writing for one episode. It's looks like 19 is going to be the season finale. (I'll release them at the the same time though!)

Thanks for your patience.

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

SEASON 1: EPISODE 18 is out! Read it by clicking the link below:

The Elderfun Chronicles

• It was great!
• It was ok.
• Haven't read it yet.
• It wasn't that good.

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Tell me how it was!

I'm hoping, (AND praying,) that I can finish the finale tonight!

[Ariella_Newheart]

The Elderfun Chronicles

She looked outside the room's only window. All she could see was the green sky. "Thanks to Lucky for that," she said sarcastically, not realizing she had said it out loud. "What's that?" said someone sitting at a table across from hers. "Oh," May straightened up. "Just thanking Lucky for this great day!" she said cheerfully. "Good," responded the person as he turned back to his food.

I liked this part. Good job! I also like how you wrote my character in this story.

[Emily_Purplebottle]

That’s was really good, Jacoby! You’re writing a season 2 right?

[Toren_Jumpspark]

That’s was really good, Jacoby! You’re writing a season 2 right?

Yeah, that's my question too?

[Ilayne_Merespark]

@Jacoby_Elderfun1 WOW!!! THAT was some awesome stuff right there, man!! So excited for the finale!!! One question though, Scarlett was wondering when her part is going to be...(she thought your story was awesome too).

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

I'm hoping, (AND praying,) that I can finish the finale tonight!

...18 days later...

I liked this part. Good job! I also like how you wrote my character in this story.

@Ariella_Newheart
Thank you very much!

That’s was really good, Jacoby! You’re writing a season 2 right?

@Emily_Purplebottle
I'm hoping to! I have some really good ideas.

Yeah, that's my question too?

@Toren_Jumpspark
Yep. Like I said, I'm planning to.

WOW!!! THAT was some awesome stuff right there, man!! So excited for the finale!!!

@Ilayne_Merespark
Thank you very much.

Scarlett was wondering when her part is going to be...(she thought your story was awesome too).

Oh... her part's going to be soon enough... maybe too soon. Tell her thanks for me!

(Sorry for the late replies! I thought I already posted about this.)

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

It's here! It's not the season finale, but it may be better then it!

SEASON 1: EPISODE 19 is out for you all!

The Elderfun Chronicles

Read it by clicking he link above!

• That was awesome!
• It was ok.
• Haven't read it yet.
• You could have done better.

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Tell me how it was!

Give me your questions here:

The Elderfun Chronicles™ Question & Answer

[Hanna_Brassheart]

Great story, @Jacoby_Elderfun1! I loved the Dr. Meh part . Great job representing my character, as well. A wonderful wrap-up to season 1!
In light of that, you may be wondering about my vote on the above poll. Well, since its beginning, your role-play story has grown bigger and more popular, earning a spot in Aethasia’s best-loved and “classic” role-plays. However, -cough-, the stylistic part of your writing such as grammar and clear dialogue formatting could use some more attention. Some of the mistakes made it difficult to understand some sentences. Re-reading sentences to understand their meaning can make it difficult to become immersed in a story. There are a bunch of great proof-reading websites and apps that can help you recognize stuff like that, and help you become your own editor. (Here’s one I like: http://www.hemingwayapp.com/)
Overall, I looooove TEC! It has such a perfect Aetherlight feel, and a great flow to the story. Please don’t stop writing it just because you have finished the season! Give me another RP topic to Watch