Nola A.: Case Unsolved (Discussion Thread!)

[Nola_Applequill1]

I liked this one!

Cool!

As for my character, you did a pretty good job.

Okay...

Ariella Newheart is rather obsessive about Pringles and cookies, though she still likes healthy stuff too.

Gotcha. It's hard for me since I'm not entirely sure what you guys like, except for the information I've gathered.

Thanks for your input.

[Jacoby_Elderfun1]

Hey, @Nola_Applequill1.

Sorry that I haven't read/liked your story that deserves it. I promise I'll get around to it. Hope those hold you over until then!

[Nola_Applequill1]

Hey, @Nola_Applequill1.

Heya!

Sorry that I haven't read/liked your story that deserves it.

Oh, no problem! You're all good.

I promise I'll get around to it. Hope those hold you over until then!

Thank you so much! Yeah, the likes are much appreciated. Thank you so much again for commenting, and also, I'm looking forward to your next chapter of TEC too!

[Nola_Applequill1]

WOW!!!

Thank you so much for your support, haha, @Skyler_Dimruin!

(It's longer than it looks, trust me. There's a whooole lot more. )

[Skyler_Dimruin]

Crosses arms and leans back in chair..... “You’re welcome.”

[Nola_Applequill1]

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Phew. *wipes sweat off of forehead * Heeeeere it is. The latest chapter. Enjoy!

• That was AWESOME! I wasn't in it, but great job nonetheless.
• That was AWESOME! You did a great job representing my character.
• That was good, but I think you should have made my character a bit different. [Explain in reply below]
• You made my character good, but I don't really like that chapter much.
• I have a suggestion! [Explain in reply below]
• That was okay, but it could have been better.
• I don't like that one as much, sorry.

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ALSO, I feel like it's too long. Was it too long?

• It's not too long! It's a perfect size!
• I think it's not too long for me personally, but in general, it might be too long.
• Yeah, I think it's a little too long.
• I think it's too long for me personally, but probably not in general.

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People Who Were Mentioned in Chapter 24, Best Laid Plans:

In order of appearance:

@Stormy_Lightscope

@Lightscape_Ironwalker

@Gloria_Oldenpinner

@Arrethtraen_Sprocketline - Mention

@Scarlett_Darkhall - Cameo

@Peregrine_Appleclock - Cameo

@Hanna_Brassheart - Cameo

[Peregrine_Appleclock]

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“The unfortunate thing is that gems are such rare little objects that the particular section is doubly guarded,” Lightscape added. “And that means that we are going to have to tranquilize - tranquilize, Nola - some of the guards protecting the piece of the Amulet. It’s purple, by the way. Then we are to quickly grab it, and run out the nearest window right… There.” He pointed at a window on the blueprint.

“Wait - rewind here,” I replied. Something wasn’t adding up. “Is this on the first floor? Because it looks like…”

Lightscape used my time of pausing to interject an answer. “No, that’s the second floor.”

“And we’re jumping out of a window,” I said. I barely could process it.

Stormy’s smile reappeared. “And that’s where the mattress comes in.”

I can't wait to see how that turns out. . . . . .

Great chapter, @Nola_Applequill1!

[Nola_Applequill1]

I can't wait to see how that turns out. . . . . .

Muahahahaha...

I KNOW, RIGHT THOUGH?!

Great chapter, @Nola_Applequill1!

THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU

SERIOUSLYTHANKYOU

THATSACOMPLIMENTCOMINGFROMSUCHANEPICWRITERASYOU

ANDIMNOTKIDDINGATALL

*calmifies *

On a more... Calm note (), I'm going to quote @Taka_Merespinner1 and say "solo Deo gloria". Glory to God for all of the inspiration and writing abilities that He has given me! WOOOOOT!

[Taka_Merespinner1]

Aw....I'm being quoted! is honored

Or wait, Bach is being quoted.

[Scarlett_Darkhall]

@Nola_Applequill1 Absolutely beautiful, my friend!!

[Nola_Applequill1]

Absolutely beautiful, my friend!!

THANK YOOOOOOU!!!

[Nola_Applequill1]

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Phew.

It's out.

There's that.

LET ME KNOW WHATCHA THINK AND BE BLUNTLY HONEST!

• That was AWESOME! I wasn't in it, but great job nonetheless.
• That was AWESOME! You did a great job representing my character.
• That was good, but I think you should have made my character a bit different. [Explain in reply below]
• You made my character good, but I don't really like that chapter much.
• I have a suggestion! [Explain in reply below]
• That was okay, but it could have been better.
• I don't like that one as much, sorry.

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And, of course, this poll will accompany it again:

• It's not too long! It's a perfect size!
• I think it's not too long for me personally, but in general, it might be too long.
• Yeah, I think it's a little too long.
• I think it's too long for me personally, but probably not in general.

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People Who Were Mentioned in Chapter 25, The Heist:

In order of appearance:

@Lightscape_Ironwalker

@Stormy_Lightscope

@Gloria_Oldenpinner

@Jacoby_Elderfun1 - Cameo

@Emily_Purplebottle

@Scarlett_Darkhall - Mention

@Grace_Newgadget - Cameo

@Hanna_Brassheart

@Ariella_Newheart

@Peregrine_Appleclock

(Continued...)

[Nola_Applequill1]

SFDP

(...Continued...)

@Lukas_Cogsworthy

@Really_Bland_And_Dull_Guard_Guy

As always, hope you enjoyed it! And PLEASE be brutally honest with me.

[Ariella_Newheart]

I enjoyed it very much! I love the way you wrote my character, especially this part:

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“Or riding an Auto,” Ariella suggested.

“Riding a what?” Peregrine asked.

“An Automaton,” Ariella explained, a mischievous smile sneaking across her face.

Hanna gave Ariella a quizzical look. “Is that even… Safe?”

Ariella shrugged. “It depends on your definition of safe.”

The conversation with Lukas was also great!

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But Emily, having being trained in the art of sneaking, had quietly sneaked away while Peregrine was talking.

Emily Purplebottle was gone.

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But instead, the metal detector went off, its bright red lights flashing and turning in warning of metal… In warning of danger.

I had messed up, and I knew it.

Oh boy, two cliffhangers in one episode? groans Why do you do this to us, Nola?!

[Peregrine_Appleclock]

You know what? I'm gonna do it.

Peri's Official Review

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But how are we going to have the piece in our hands? Would we just break the glass somehow? It all seems a little… Too easy. And vague. I wonder if there’s something they’re hiding from me.

My thoughts exactly. . .

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Stormy must have taken it.

Or did she. . .

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But was it?

. . . Well this is intriguing. o.o

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Gloria Oldenpinner had been digging through files with Jacoby Elderfun and Emily Purplebottle, trying to find the most probable places Nola would have gone, judging by her personality and history.

Well done fitting all those people in, by the way! I haven't figured it out yet with my own roleplay.

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Meanwhile, Grace Newgadget helped Ariella Newheart, Hanna Brassheart and Peregrine Appleclock map out all of Aethasia, as they tried to determine where Nola would be by that time of day.

Again. . . wow. Also, good to see that I'm still in the mix somewhere.

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“Or riding an Auto,” Ariella suggested.

“Riding a what?” Peregrine asked.

Whaaat? I imagined myself giving Ariella a weird amused expression, and laughing a bit. "Riding a WHATnow?? O.o"

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“Is that even… Safe?”

I can just imagine Nola riding on the shoulders of a Pacifier like a rearing horse, wearing a cowboy hat and thrashing a whip.

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piratey-looking outfit

Of course. How very Parker-esque. (I daresay you understand which "Parker" I'm talking about. . .)

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something you would wear at a masquerade.

"MASQUERADE!!! PAPER FACES ON PARADE! MASQUERADE. . ." AHEM, Excuse me. . . That is literally one of my favorite PotO songs EVER.

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There just needed to be some kind of extra touch.

Hat?

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From the pictures I’ve seen of my father… As a pirate…

-blinks-

Wait, WHAT?? O.O Seriously?!

That's pretty awesome.

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Suddenly, I noticed something - a hat on a hat rack.

CALLED IT.

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Peregrine Appleclock’s eyes darted around, scanning the mines.

OOOHHHHEEEEK I just got excited all of a sudden. . .

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Emily wasn’t there!

Ohhhh dear. . .

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But Emily, having being trained in the art of sneaking, had quietly sneaked away while Peregrine was talking.

Wow, my inner Peri is boiling right now.

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Stormy placed the label over the can of pepper spray,

I'm getting Doctor Who vibes from Stormy and Lightscape right now. . . Improvising, childish mischief yet still clever enough to, say, break into a museum. . .

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It wouldn’t make much sense if I had a can of shaving cream in my backpack.”

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I stifled an eyebrow raise

That's a first.

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As we advanced closer toward the guards,

I have the feeling this is your longest installment so far. . .

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I had messed up, and I knew it.

Oh boyyy, I sure hope not.

Well done! @Nola_Applequill1

[Emily_Purplebottle]

Oh my goodness! That was amazing @Nola_Applequill1!

You captured Emily’s personality very well.

[Nola_Applequill1]

I enjoyed it very much! I love the way you wrote my character, especially this part:

O . O

OOO . OOO

Well, I am... I AM VERY GLAD!

The conversation with Lukas was also great!

Hah, I'm so glad!

Oh boy, two cliffhangers in one episode? groans Why do you do this to us, Nola?!

BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!! OMGoodness. Thanks so much, and again, GLORY TO GOD for all of my inspiration of writingness!

You know what? I'm gonna do it.

O . O

No.

Way.

I can just imagine Nola riding on the shoulders of a Pacifier like a rearing horse, wearing a cowboy hat and thrashing a whip.

LIRLing! Very hard!

Of course. How very Parker-esque.

AHAHAHAHA!

(I daresay you understand which "Parker" I'm talking about. . .)

I indeed do.

I have the feeling this is your longest installment so far. . .

It is.

Peri's Official Review

I AM FREAKING OUT, PEREGRINE APPLECLOCK, I AM FREAKING OUT.

You hath made my night, and I thank you.

Oh my goodness! That was amazing @Nola_Applequill1!

Thank you so much!

You captured Emily’s personality very well.

YISSSSS I am glad.

@Ariella_Newheart @Peregrine_Appleclock @Emily_Purplebottle - thank you girls so much! Y'all totally made my day. Again, glory to God, and THANK YOU SO MUCH AAAAAAAH!

I literally screamed out loud when I saw Ariella's post, and then I screamed louder and started laughing so hard when I saw Peri's.

[Lightscape_Ironwalker]

This as usual is amazing. I LOVE how you split the storylines into multiples and now more than one thing is going on. True epicness. !

[Nola_Applequill1]

This as usual is amazing.

O . O

THANK YOU!

I LOVE how you split the storylines into multiples and now more than one thing is going on.

OOO . OOO

THANK YOU VERY MUCH SO.

True epicness. !

*bursts into thank yous *

[Eerie_Coppernight]

I would appreciate one thing clarified for me, Mademoiselle Otterview is Mandalorian?