A Light in the Darkness Discussion

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

Uhhhhh...I'm closer to being done than I used to be?

I didn't realize so many people were waiting for this...

Do not fear, @Ariella_Newheart! I will work on it a lot today. I only have to write three or four more segments and then edit it and I'll be done!

[Ariella_Newheart]

Do not fear, @Ariella_Newheart! I will work on it a lot today. I only have to write three or four more segments and then edit it and I'll be done!

YES! I am excited.

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

I'm finished with the chapter! Wooo!!!!

I will be posting it momentarily.

[Peregrine_Appleclock]

Oh my word, that was fantastic. I do believe you have one of the best roleplays on the forum. Keep it up!!

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

Thank you. I am honored.

[Ariella_Newheart]

That chapter was intense. Good job, @Kitty_Ironcraft!

My reactions:

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"That's what they always say,"

True, Zaul. Very true.

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It remotely signals the fog injector attached to your back," he held up the remote, "It has ten settings. According to my calculations, the first setting will inject just enough fog into you to make you more willing to communicate. At the fourth setting, the fog will begin to cause you physical pain. The seventh setting will cause enough pain to knock you out. Setting nine will be very traumatic for your body. I do not know what that will do to you, but it may cause permanent damage to your mind. Do you want to guess what happens at setting ten?"

Ow. That's evil.

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She was confused, but then realization struck her, So I guess there's only one way in.

Of course Zaul wouldn't put a convenient back door in his interrogation facility.

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"Pick it up," Anzok said, "Pick it up and fight me! Then we'll see who is truly better!" Anzok spun his hammer around a few times, "In case you don't recognize it," he gloated, "this is the same hammer that took your memory three years ago!"

Grr. This guy needs to be taken down a peg or twenty.

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"Justice," he replied, and then punched me hard in the face.

Owwww.

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Extending its bayonet, the automaton worked to pick up the weapon. The knife clanked against the cane. The Pacifier struggled in vain for a few seconds before rising to its full height.

"LIMBS ARE INADEQUATE!"

I can't express how hilariously satisfying that image is.

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The automatons continued on again, kicking the Dueling Cane along as they walked.

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The automaton that had been kicking the cane tripped over it and collapsed to the ground. It was presently trying and failing to right itself.

My goodness...

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At last I whispered, "No...not you too."

Rayna closed the door, smiling at me with a dark look in her eyes. "It's nice to see you again, Kitty," she crooned.

NOOOO WAY. I feel so bad for Kitty right now...

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The armor never glowed so strongly on any other subject, except for Wolfe. That means you are trying to fight it.

Interesting...

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There is so much darkness in the world, and so many good, innocent people aren't able to find the light through all of the shadow.

glances at the title of the role-play

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I wasn't able to get your Aethermeter

That's too bad. Kitty needs some Aether right about now.

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"Maybe..." Kitty said suspiciously, eying Rayna's clothing closely, "Why are you still wearing that cloak?"

Don't tell me she still has the fog armor on.

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She aimed a pistol with her right hand and removed the fog remote with her left hand, the dial set to level four. "I'm sorry, Kitty," her voice was sad.

Ohh, I get it! She was hoping he would lead her to the Resistance base. Quite a devious plan.

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"Our eyes are used to the dark. Theirs' aren't. That should help us escape."

Good idea, Kitty.

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Auriel had been caught by an autofficer.

Not again!

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He began to shake his head furiously, "No no NO! None of this makes any sense! Why did she sacrifice herself!? How can this happen to good people!? Why is there so much evil in the world!? How am I supposed to fight this much darkness!? WHERE ARE YOU!!!???" he screamed.

Silence.

A few moments later, a soft but strong voice came from behind him, "I'm right here."

I really like this. You do a great job of building tension in a scene through the use of dialogue.

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Kitty spun around. It was hard to see the newcomer because his head seemed to be crowned with the rising sun. Looking closer, he realized who it was.

Before him stood the Scarlet Man.

YEEEEEESSSSSS! FINALLY! This is the moment I've been waiting for since the beginning of the role-play!

[Caleb_Maxbridge]

Great job on this role-play, @Kitty_Ironcraft! I saw this one day, read it all and when it ended I checked it every time it showed up in the Suggested Topics area. And now I can't wait for the next chapter! GREAT JOB!

[Hanna_Brassheart]

I just got caught up on this RP! IT’S SO GOOD, @Kitty_Ironcraft!
One question. Why did Zaul have black makeup on the back of his head?

And now I can't wait for the next chapter!

Same!

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

Zaul had the black makeup so it would appear that Rayna had knocked him out and given him a nasty bruise. It was all part of the ploy.

[Hanna_Brassheart]

Sneaky sneaky sneaky Thanks for explaining!

[Ariella_Newheart]

Any progress on this story lately, @Kitty_Ironcraft?

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

Sees Ariella's post.

I was so busy working on the story, I didn't see your post. The next chapter came out just now, actually. Enjoy!

@Ariella_Newheart.

[Ariella_Newheart]

logs back on

NO WAY! That's a crazy coincidence!

I'm gonna read right now. zooms away

[Ariella_Newheart]

SFTDP

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"Why is there so much darkness in Aethasia? Why doesn't the Great Engineer come back and make everything right?"

Sometimes I ask myself the same question...

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By leaving, he gave each of them the chance to choose him, even though they could no longer find him. If you knew for certain that the Great Engineer existed, then it would take no effort to believe that he existed. You would just follow him blindly because you knew it was the right thing to do.

Love the allegory here.

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"One day, that will be made right," he said and then was silent.

I looked up in confusion wondering what he meant.

I think I know what he means...

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The Scarlet Man was behind me, working to remove the fog injector from my back.

winces

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It was a beautiful blade; very long and with a golden hue.

OOOOOOOHHH!

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Unfortunately for me, the lake decided to accept me into its depths and I found myself in a few inches of cold water.

I was incredulous. How did he do that? Some kind of Engineer tech that allows him to stand on water?

Hahahaha

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I spun around several times, rapidly hitting his block with my blades. I finished my attack and then caught his sword between my own swords. I twirled the sword out of his hand and continued attacking him, mad with anger and sadness.

I like this scene. It sorta reminds me of the part in Rebels where Sabine was training.

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Opening my eyes, I faced the Scarlet Man. "I am Kitty Ironcraft, a Light in the Darkness!" I took his hand.

With a surprising, and yet gentile strength, he embraced me. It seemed like he had been waiting for this moment since the beginning of time. He shook, and I wasn't sure if he was laughing or crying tears of joy. His arms filled me with warmth, and I had never felt such love.

Awww...this makes me happy. wipes away a tear

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

I like this scene. It sorta reminds me of the part in Rebels where Sabine was training.

Yeah!!! I really like that scene too.

Awww...this makes me happy. wipes away a tear

I'm glad my writing is making a difference.

[Rex_Blackdash]

It sorta reminds me of the part in Rebels where Sabine was training.

Me too!

I'm glad my writing is making a difference.

Yeah, i like this story a lot.

[Ariella_Newheart]

@Kitty_Ironcraft, all of these Scriptures about light and darkness made me think of your role-play.

Merry christmas everyone :) 🎄🎄

Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and your family!

[Ariella_Newheart]

Great chapter, @Kitty_Ironcraft.

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"You have a spare what?" Anzok asked, confused and a little bit angry about being left out of the loop.

Zaul turned back, smiling darkly, "You'll see."

That's not good.

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"Stop!" came a calm, cold voice. Raven.

She stepped through the crowd and stood next to Kitty, saying, "And we're supposed to believe you?" Her eyes poured out hate.

Oh, here we go. grits teeth

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Kitty looked at them all. He was confused, angry, and hurt. How can these people who claim to serve the Great Engineer be so heartless? Finally, he felt understanding. Nate's decision made sense, but it was based too much off of distrust and not enough on love.

Ouch. That's frustrating. Nate could have at least sent someone out to try to confirm Kitty's story instead of shutting down the whole operation like that.

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"Did you tell the Empire about our base!?" she shouted.

"No," he replied, still walking away.

"I don't believe you!"

Didn't think so.

All right, now she's really getting on my nerves. Something must have happened to her to make her so distrustful of people.

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"You're an autofficer!" Raven shouted, slashing down with her knives, "You're working for the Empire! You're evil! I won't let you hurt my friends any longer!"

Mmmmm, okay, that makes sense. She wants to protect her friends, but is doing it in a very twisted fashion.

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She fell to her knees, "I don't understand," she repeated, "How come I, a Resistor would have killed him, but he, an autofficer, an imperial!...spared my life?" She couldn't understand. "Aren't we the good guys!? How can the Resistance treat others so harshly!? Shouldn't we be more like the Great Engineer!? Help me! I don't know what to do!"

She collapsed into a stack of pillows, crying into her arm. It seemed like the entire foundation of her beliefs had changed.

Aha! That fight is exactly what was needed to spark a change of heart in her. I just hope the change is for the better.

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"We had one more suit of fog armor and it seemed to fit Auriel quite nicely. She has so far been able to resist it, but we can tell it's wearing her down. I expect we'll learn everything we need to know before morning."

OH...NO.

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Rayna fell to the table, whimpering. Slowly, the tears began to stop. Rayna rose, and a green glint was in her eyes.

She smiled, "For the glory of the Empire."

Noooo...she was so close.

[Kitty_Ironcraft]

The stage is set.

[Lila_Lightcraft]

Oh. My. Word. I just finished reading your story Kitty, and... That was probably THE BEST AETHERLIGHT STORY I'VE EVER READ!!!! It's overflowing with exciting twists, deep emotions, and amazing characters. I litterally could not stop reading, and I'm full of chills after reading that last chapter. You most definitely could turn this story into a best selling novel, I'm not kidding. It has an CRAZY AWESOME storyline and I absolutely love that you created your own characters so you can do whatever you want with them! The only slight flaw is that you need to work on describing your characters and surroundings more but other then that I give it 10 of out 10 star rating!!! Can't wait for the next chapter, EEEE!!! -fangirls-